Everyone’s in the house; it’s
my turn to ride the new riding lawnmower. I’m so happy that Travis showed me
how to turn it on and the basics of driving.
I slide into the set and look down at the controllers. I’m so happy that
Dad decided to buy this, it will be so much better than the push mower. I click
the switch onto the on position, and then push the start button the engine roars
to a start.
****
I slowly drive through the
back field and all over the back yard after a little while I was zipping all
over the yard. I swing around the front yard do a few loops I decided it’s time
to slow it down a little bit. I come around the front end of my Grandfathers
pick-up truck but I didn’t cut the wheel right and ran right into the bumper. I
couldn't figure out how to use the brake so I keep bumping it over and over again
till I finally turn the stupid tracker off. Then I found reverse and slowly
drove the mower to the barn, parked it and just sat there.
*****
I walked into the kitchen,
sat on the bench by the front window.
Now this one, no, does not work--you don't give the reader quite enough to work with and it feels like you simply stopped writing rather than came up with a way to close.
ReplyDeleteTry a rewrite.