Friday, November 11, 2011

#40 Rewrite – week 9



Everyone’s in the house; it’s my turn to ride the new riding lawnmower. I’m so happy that Travis showed me how to turn it on and the basics of driving.  I slide into the set and look down at the controllers. I’m so happy that Dad decided to buy this, it will be so much better than the push mower. I click the switch onto the on position, and then push the start button the engine roars to a start. 
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I slowly drive through the back field and all over the back yard after a little while I was zipping all over the yard. I swing around the front yard do a few loops I decided it’s time to slow it down a little bit. I come around the front end of my Grandfathers pick-up truck but I didn’t cut the wheel right and ran right into the bumper. I couldn't figure out how to use the brake so I keep bumping it over and over again till I finally turn the stupid tracker off. Then I found reverse and slowly drove the mower to the barn, parked it and just sat there.
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I walked into the kitchen, sat on the bench by the front window.  I’m patiently waiting for the stern talking to I’m going to get from my mother. By the time I look up my Grandfather is just about to ruffle my hair and then he walks out the door. I turn and watch him walk to his truck; he doesn’t look at the bumper, just starts it up and back it out of the driveway.           

1 comment:

  1. There you go! That's an ending--vignettes often end on sort of a flat note, hanging in the air a bit, leaving the piece complete in one way, unresolved in another. You've got it just right.

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